FIC: Torchwood drabble: Immortality

[fajrdrako]

Title: Immortality
Author: fajrdrako
Fandom: Torchwood
Characters: Captain Jack Harkness, sex alien
Challenge: #14 "The last thing I remember" on tw100
Rating: G
Words: 100
Notes: Spoilers for "Day One".


Immortality

He kissed me, kissed Carys, and he gave me nothing. An infusion of life energy, not sex energy. He felt no lust. His compassion was useless.

His pheromones sang to me. He loved male sexuality as much as I did. Stronger than human, he was desirable by any standards. If I took his body – instead of that foolish weak girl's – we could take on the world together. He would never die. Neither would I.

I prepared to leap. I could feel his anticipation. But of what?

Then I was imprisoned, isolated, dying.

The last thing I remember is his indifference.

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Comments

[sartorias.livejournal.com]

Though I haven't seen the show, I found that most evocative!

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you did! You're so fast, I was still poking at it, changing a few words - a case, I suppose, of premature posting. There. I'm done now.

I'm afraid I've spoiled you for the ending of the second Torchwood episode, "Day One", the episode about the sex alien, should you ever see it. At least I wasn't terribly specific about what happens to her!

[sartorias.livejournal.com]

By the time I get to see the show, I won't remember. (I only get to watch TV in summer, and then of course I'm fighting against the other TV-aholics in the family!) And even if I did, I actually rather like spoilers.

Anyway, if you've done a bit of fixing, I'll go back and reread it.

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

By the time I get to see the show, I won't remember.

Yeah - I wouldn't either.

if you've done a bit of fixing

Yes, I'm done, finished, through with it. Slap my hand if I try to "fix" anything else. I should know when to declare a story finished and stop fiddling with it. Really! I have such trouble stopping at the end.

[kikibug13.livejournal.com]

Awww!

I love the piece. The alien... wasn't a PoV I'd have thought about :)

But I cannot agree with the perception of the alien. Dispassionate is the last way I see Jack, it may be just wishful thinking on my part, but it just isn't.

Of course, the alien's perspective just might be different.
(Or perhaps I just cannot imagine anybody getting more 'passion' vibe from Carys's ex than from Jack ;) )

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

Well, Carys's ex was an idiot!

I don't think the alien - speaking for the one of my story here, not necessarily the one in the episode - really understood Jack: she could read his pheromones in general, but not his specific mood or feelings. Or perhaps I'm just trying to say that the sex alien wasn't very smart when it came to humans - she saw their sexual energies but didn't understand much else about them, and just depended on the minds of those she was inhabiting to handle the subtle stuff.

I enjoyed writing the alien viewpoint. I think I want to do it again.

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

Oh, and P.S. - since I think one of the most poignant moments in all of Torchwood is Jack's identification with the sex alien when he says, "Travel halfway across the universe for the greatest sex, still end up dying alone" - I don't think Jack was indifferent in the least!

[kikibug13.livejournal.com]

Hehe... trusting my intuition. I started writing that I don't agree with you on Jack being indifferent... then went back and changed that to disagreeing with the alien ;) turned out the change was correct.

I'm still thinking on light!Owen stuff. And falling still more behind on my Titanic!Rose/Jack Harkness fic... Have to catch up on sleep and do some work, this weekend :)

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

I'm still thinking on light!Owen stuff.

I love the concept, though I'm unconvinced it's possible!

Don't you wish there was more time in the world to just write?

[kikibug13.livejournal.com]

I've been convinced these... oh, couple of weeks, that 26.7-hour day cycles are the only solution for my time-shortage problems.

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

I keep stealing time from sleep to write. I am getting SOOOO tired.... and then at some point I'm too tired to write any more.

Have to find a better solution. But what?

[sartorias.livejournal.com]

Ooooh, even tighter. Yeah!

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

(Grin.) Thanks!