FIC Torchwood (poem): Jasmine

[fajrdrako]

Title: Jasmine
Fandom: Torchwood
Author: fajrdrako
Characters: Jack
Genre: Poem #5
Rating: G
Disclaimer: Not mine, no claims, all property of the BBC.
Notes: No spoilers, though deals with elements from "Small Worlds". Cross-posted to my LJ and torch_wood.


Jasmine

Somewhere a young child went missing.
Myth met the real world and prevailed.
A little girl slipped through the crack.
Love took her, smiling as she went.
Love left her mother despairing.

Waiting for another myth, an
Outstanding event in space-time,
Reality gave way to the
Logically impossible.
Dimensions unfolding, showing
Starry, starry nights of wonder.

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Fifth in a series following Endings and Beginnings, Notes for Gwen Cooper, Time Present, and Camping.



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Comments

[raissad.livejournal.com]

Lovely! The second verse is my favorite.

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

Thank you for saying you enjoyed it.

[damalan.livejournal.com]

Oh yes! I think this might be your best yet. I think I like "Myth met the real world and prevailed" as the best line, just because it captures so well what Jack said about the faeries.

Bravo!

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

I think this might be your best yet.

Really? Thank you! I'm trying to go for a different tone in each one (for variety) and sometimes it's tricky to see how I'm managing.

[damalan.livejournal.com]

That's where we differ (and where your skill outmatches my own). I don't think in these I could actually try for any particular tone. They either just form or don't form. About the only control I have is choosing the title which seems to help select the words I use.

So I commend your proficiency.

*bows*

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

I just try for 'different'. But... each poem does its own thing, too. And if it really doesn't work, I scrap it and try again. I still don't have "They Keep Killing Suzie", drat.